Walk Alone...

Walk alone, walk alone
The one was with you...
Have gone, have gone...
Walk alone, walk alone

You have to walk like never before,
You have to fly, not to cry...
fly like never before.....
Walk alone, walk alone

Hey, Friends.
It my own creation.
How it is?

Not Bad.
As far as my grammatical knowledge goes,
"The one was with you...
Have gone, have gone..." is wrong.

"The ones who were with you
Have gone , have gone"

Or
"The one who was with you
Has gone, has gone"
is right grammatically. ( i ain't no poet, hence I don't know how right it is to break grammer)

The corerelation between the two paragraphs is bad.
(I am giving my honest opinion).

Good effort for a starter I guess.

-Kalayama

Madam, thanks for suggestion.
But when you write a Lyric, there is no grammar.

I am a lyrics writer also and i know it very well.

Try to see the emotions and message behind it.

I ain't no Madam. I am a man.
Oh! No need of basic grammer too? The [B]one[/B] with you - [B]have[/B] doesn't make practical sense as one means singular and "have" in this context is plural. May be I am wrong.
That's why I had mentioned "(i ain't no poet, hence I don't know how right it is to break grammer)":D

May be I shouldn't have ventured into commenting when I didn't have enough knowledge:p But, that's how we learn:D

Anyway, good effort Brijesh.

Cheers,
Kalayama

Sorry friend, I misunderstood your name.

You are right , we learn by our mistakes and others can trace them better.

Actually I write in hindi only,
The upcoming movie "Bus Thoda Aur",
Will be loaded with my lyrics.I hope for movie in coming year(May be near june).

That's great news. Will ensure that I check out the lyrics of that movie :D
And also, one can't directly traslate Hindi to English as the basic structure of language itself is different:)

That's a achievement dude! Kuddos!

Cheers,
Kalayama